SCRIPT SURGERY: TV Pilot Teaser - Screenwriting Tips

I just received Scriptfella's feedback on the first 10 pages of my script and I have to say WOW! This was an invaluable critique for me. As I was listening, I was occasionally distracted by this thought: "If only ONE of my writing professors had taken the time to do a deep dive like this, I would be miles ahead of where I am today." There are bad habits I've fallen into which other professional readers have never called out. Having someone analyze each line as they read through your script really provides insight into details that other readers would gloss over. I highly recommend his services.

Do you think I should make more of these deep dive videos?

Shut up and take my money! The whole video I was jealous of the writer that got your notes, then your offer comes up at the end. Yay! I can’t wait! Instant subscriber. Thanks!

This is the stuff I want from every scriptwriting youtube channel. Fantastic.

This was such a useful video. It’s easy to forget that a script has to be evocative and go for a purely factual account of what’s happening. It’s good to be reminded that it should read well.

If ever there was a tutorial that highlighted the need to just get your ideas on paper first and edit them second, then this was it. Looking forward to learning the entire list unforced errors.

This is pure gold. 2 things: First: Yes, you should do more of these deep dive videos. Second: You should have way more subs. Hopefully more writers find your channel because this the best (most helpful, clear, instructional, useful) video I have seen on YT regarding this subject... and I have watch a plethora. Even the ones from USC professors. Your video has inspired me to write another script! Thank you! Keep wiring Grai Cash - it's a great concept and I would definitely be interested in watching the pilot based on the logline and teaser.

10:16 "Hole, man, shovel, out". This is great.

Here I am, two years later from when this was posted, and I am eating every critique up like its tonight's dinner! I am currently writing my first TV Script, and all I wanted to know was if my teaser should have dialogue. I stumbled across this video and never went looking anywhere else. I am not even finished watching the video, but the first 12:34 minutes has me stopping to comment. All of that just to say....I LOVE THIS!! Okay, let me get on with watching until the end. I am subscribing. I didn't even look to see if you have anything more recent. Just in case, I'm hitting SUBSCRIBE!

Fantastic video, great insight on overwriting vs voice

This is great! Gai has a great voice and I think he'll go far as he develops his craft. Thanks for the analysis, Script Fella.

This was great. I'm startled, I'm inspired. Thank you!

I just got notes again. I learn a lot from him every time. Highly recommended.

Dominick, thank you for this! Everything mistake in Grai's script I see in mine. It's just amazing how much fat I have in description and dialog. I also observed that I'm not being visually "descriptive" enough. Man, thanks i appreciate it.

Yes please, more of this. Thnx

The teaser shows something about the missing daughter but nothing about the ancient Mayan Cult, which I think is really important since it is what makes the series unique.

Excellent video, Dominic! Thank you!

I absolutely enjoy your dive video!

More of these, please! Very insightful content that I wish there was more of on youtube!

This is great @scriptfella! Thank you